https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gc7E6T5bXjw&t=21s
The last pitch I did lacked guidance and direction. I had no idea what to put in my pitch and I was so worried about time that I couldn't focus on the items at hand. I felt rushed and very over pressed in the sense that I was rushing through the pitch. With this elevator pitch I tried to appeal, align, and educate the customer all at once. I feel like this pitch was marginally better then the last and might actually be a seller If I redo it for the purpose of my business in the future. I changed the structure of the pitch, first starting with a topic that is well known and inspiring, individuals who are facing obstacles that are viewable to the audience. This gives motivation, something along the lines of "If someone with no legs can win a running marathon in the olympics than I can make simple changes to my life" obviously it goes beyond just doing it but that is the first step in anything: the Motivation to begin.
Tara,
ReplyDeleteThis is a really good elevator pitch. You spoke at a speed and tone that made me want to listen. You spoke softly but at the same time seemed calm and passionate which I appreciated. I also liked the structure, asking yourself a question to move forward seemed like a good choice. The only part where I was a bit confused was with the hook, I am not completely sure how it relates to your product, I think you need an additional bridge from that point.
Brandon
Hey Tara,
ReplyDeleteI definitely think this pitch is much better than your first and I myself feel like we both improved from pitch 1 to pitch 2. You seemed very confident and I think that you showed great enthusiasm and a knowledge of the product that goes a long way in gaining your audience's credibility. It can always be improved and you maybe tweak the hook a bit to make it a little more eye-popping. I thought you did a great job overall.